Matt Bellamy

Oh my gosh Mooz, you're gorgeous! Love the first picture. Marry me?

Which version, though? Jeff Buckley's rocks my socks. And, to keep on topic, I'm keeping my name forever

S'been a while. Y'all look uber, as usual!

Done! Anymore for any more?

Very cute! I think it would look nicer if there were some capitalization, though. And I don't like that it dies, I would prefer it if it perhaps, rested on ...

AWF, you need five hundred points to post a story in the Advanced Critiques section.

I have an inkling that it belongs to this site since so many other sites link to it. I reckon your best bet would be to email them and maybe ...

Hey, firstly, welcome to the site. Here at YWS we do ask that you review two pieces of work before submitting your own, so you might want to take a ...

My lack of stars is really quite pathetic, considering the length of time I have been here. And being a mod too, I hope nobody holds it against me. xD

Done!

Firstly, "dribbling shadows" is a great line. Secondly, I'm sensing a pattern in your style - rather dark, no? ;) I loved the first poem particularly, the first three lines ...

This was pretty good. A few things though: First you say you taste blood, and that he has hit your cheek, but then you say "he won't, he can't" as ...

I didn't find it confusing at all. However, it is a little cliché in places. I think you should add a little more to it to make it more personal ...

This sounds angry, and, while I know it sounds angry, it doesn't make me feel angry too, and really good poetry should do that. Your line breaks are strange, especially ...

I critiqued both of your works. More requests please!